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Man the Lifeboats! Images from Wreck and Sinking of the Titanic, 1912. uh.edu

You look at me

As if from a great distance ~

As would a survivor in a

Lifeboat look at a

Doomed man on the deck ~

I can tell in your mind

I am already gone ~

A memory from the past

You have unfriended me ~

And blocked my access

To all your social sites ~

I fear that if I come to call

Your maid will tell me

You’re not in ~

Not into me, no ~

Never again will I be

On your guest list ~

Nor will your friends

Be my friends any more ~

I am no longer in ~

My flavor has lost

Its brief appeal ~

I’ve fallen so far from

My place near your star ~

And even though I knew

This day would come ~

The pain is startling ~

More intense than ever

I’d foreseen ~

And I will always see your eyes ~

The day you never even said goodbye ~

© 2012, Melody Haislip. All rights reserved.

Melody Haislip (23 Posts)

I began writing poetry in my early 20s, and then put it aside and forgot it. Then a couple of years ago, I suddenly began writing ~ about everything under the sun ~ and I began to write poetry again. Or perhaps I should say channel more than write, since I feel that I am merely the conduit for some of the pieces I write. Those are the best of times, when the words flow, and those are the words which speak to others. Wish I could live in that state all the time!


10 Comments

  1. His or her loss I say, and good RIDDANCE! (I’m just in that kind of mood today, my normal posture of tolerance ougghta be back in awhile).

    Love the use of this visual for this, it really makes a strong statement. And it’s so NOT you I can’t help but admire your stand here.

    Pete

    • Melody Haislip (Author)

      The idea for this came to me yesterday when I was on my way to the library. The door to the Max Train had just closed, and several people had arrived too late to board. I was standing looking out and suddenly wondered what we looked like, we lucky riders, to those who had missed the train. As soon as I arrived at my destination, I asked a librarian for a sheet of paper and this poem came pouring out. I almost called it “Modem Love”. :)

  2. Melody,

    Not only do I and have some time love your poetry as you, I hope know. And Modern Love is no exception. And for the first time I read the profile above. And all i can say is thank you for another peek into you heart and soul. Beautiful.

    • Melody Haislip (Author)

      Thank you, Dan. I’m a big fan of yours as well. I’m so happy to be writing poetry again. I think my brain has been taking notes secretly all this time. What a wonderful thing the brain is, and the heart. Between them we remember everything, so nothing is ever truly lost.

  3. Melody, this is such and aching poem and so beautifully written. What can be more painful than unrequited love? You make us feel every morsel of the hurt.

    • Melody Haislip (Author)

      It’s so painful and so difficult to believe, when a person for whom you care doesn’t feel the same. It’s very wounding to the ego. I mean, you’ve offered your love and your Self and this person doesn’t want them. Even worse if they’ve had your all and tossed it away. 10 out of 10 on the pain scale!

  4. You know they say that love hurts but in this time and age of social media, I believe that if some people understood how cutting-off their online friendship hurt the other person, they might not do it. This is a reminder that feelings can be very hurt when one person has purposely ostracized someone. Forgiveness is key and your poem is a modern tribute to these online connections we make.

    On the other hand think of it this way, we meet and when the time is up we part. Sometimes the timing is very off or there are no reasons given … but I agree … it still smarts.

    What an excellent poem!

  5. Melody Haislip (Author)

    Yes, and these days the breakups are usually so public you can’t even grieve in private, because everybody knows, which adds an extra dimension to the pain! Oh, the blessings and the curses of the internet age!

    Thank you, Theresa, I’m so glad you liked it.

  6. I loved reading this Melody. It’s great how you used all those different ways we have now to alienate another (!) some literal others I am sure more metaphorical, and others not so modern such as the maid – (unless s/he was/is very rich!) loved the flow of it, and the touch of bitterness and sarcasm and humour, very clever, very sassy, very cool, and you have style! Their loss completely :-) Of course.

  7. Melody J Haislip (Author)

    Sam, we certainly have our ways of distancing ourselves from others these days. I know the maid was sort of anachronistic, but she Would be in the poem and there was nothing I could do. I like the way it worked out so that it could apply equally to lovers or to friends.

    Thank you for your very comprehensive compliment. I’m glad you enjoyed it. :)

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